Concept Experience #6

Critique the in-text citations, signal phrases and links.

20081203_RedPens-11. It has been shown through research that feelings displayed on Facebook are contagious. If you see more positive posts than negative posts, then you start posting more positive posts as well.

The first link about the emotions on Facebook affecting other users was very applicable in this situation. They also summarize the article with one condensed sentence that left out a few points like who wrote the article, credentials and other facts they could have included. They failed at including a signal phrase, in-text citation, and using a useful quote to add to “contagious” Although the link they used was a great definition the word “contagious” used in medical terms it was not relevant to the use of “contagious” in this article. In addition they could have used a better signal phrase and added some in-text citations, but since it was more of a summary it was not needed.

2. There have been studies done on Facebook and all the emotions related to posts. “We have enough power in this data set to show that emotional expressions spread online and also that positive expressions spread more than negative.”

This example had a general idea, displayed their point, and included an in-text citation. They also did not use effective signal phrases in their writing. First, they used a rudimentary link of the Facebook log in screen. Although this might be helpful if someone did not know what Facebook was, it should have been stated earlier in their overall writing. Second, like example 1, the positive expression link was a link that had to do with medical issues not psychological or social issues which would have been helpful in this example.

3. Researchers in a new study have found that feelings displayed on Facebook are contagious. They found enough data to show that “emotional expressions spread online and also that positive expressions spread more than negative.”

This example is a combined and better model of example 1 and example 2. They used a great in-text citation, a fairly good signal phrase, and a link to the article they were pulling information from. They did not necessarily fail, but could improve on using a better signal phrase, including credentials, and including more about the data that was found or elaborating on the in-text citation.

4. In a new study, researchers from University of California, San Diego have found that feelings displayed on Facebook are contagious. Publishing a paper in the journal PLOS ONE, the team analyzed over a billion anonymous status updates from more than 100 million Facebook subscribers across the United States and found that positive posts beget positive posts and negative posts beget negative posts. They said that while both are common on the site, the positive posts are more influential. They concluded, “We have enough power in this data set to show that emotional expressions spread online and also that positive expressions spread more than negative.”

The writer used great signal phrases to give credibility to who is speaking, where this article was physically published, and where online it was published. Unlike example 3, which was the best example until this one, example 4 includes statistics and a more elaborate explanation behind the in-text citation that was chosen.

Giving the reader more information about the quote makes it easier to understand and less likely for you to have to find the answer. Lastly the link to the article was a good choice because in the article it detailed on the research as a whole and also offered visuals to their findings. Furthermore, this article also listed all of the other authors that were included in the experiment, essentially giving credit to them.

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