• jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 1 month ago

    At the clinic I wrote about, people didn’t know they had diabetes until they started coming to the clinic – (serious) complications from diabetes was often what initiated their referral. The clinic specifically serves un-/under-insured people with complex health needs. Most didn’t have any sort of regular or on-going care until coming to the…[Read more]

    • If you do some additional checking on Mr. Chavis, I think you will find him involved in a CSA and other attempts to provide fresh produce in Richmond.

      The Farm Bus is an interesting concept. Unfortunately, it no longer comes South of the River.

      Listing and describing the community resourses for clinicians could be a great MS level class project.

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused
    Excellent introduction, very clear.

    2. Essay is organized logically and very well-written
    Very well written, easy to read, and easy to follow. You did a great job of structuring the essay in a logical way: laying out what fast food is a health issue, how it is related to schools,…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused
    Your thesis was clearly articulated. You clearly laid out that you would be writing about food addiction, but that evidence was still inconclusive as to whether it exists and/or contributes to obesity.

    2. Essay is organized logically and very well-written
    I thought the essay was…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    Thanks for the suggestions I added some more info about food labeling and benefits of Omega 3!

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused
    Your thesis was clear in that you intended to discuss contradictory nutrition messages. It would have been stronger if you could have incorporated into the introduction, some reference of your intention to also discuss whole food diet.

    2. Essay is organized logically and very…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused
    You did a nice job of introducing the topic and explaining why nutrition is important. I especially liked this sentence: “… consuming nutritional food is a powerful tool in achieving desired life.” The idea of food as powerful is, well, powerful! This will age me, but it made me think…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused
    Your opening paragraphs clearly introduced the topic you would be writing about and from the beginning I understood your point of view.

    2. Essay is organized logically and very well-written
    You did a great job with this. Your essay was organized really well and you were able to…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    I totally agree that the “I don’t have time” issue is a weak excuse, yet it is one that is used all the time. I think education clearly part of the solution, but so is a general culture change towards a greater acceptance of the importance of healthy eating. I think culture change occurs individual by individual and slowly new norms are…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused
    Your thesis was clearly defined. You explained that the purpose of the essay was to explore the history of the food production system and the main contributors of changes to the system.

    2. Essay is organized logically and very well-written
    Your essay had good flow and good…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 2 months ago

    I feel like Chipolte, in general, is kind of a yuppie place – I tend to see them in trendy, more upper-class type neighborhoods as opposed to low-income, inner-city, etc (in Richmond we have one in Carytown and one on campus, that’s it, the rest are out in the ‘burbs) – so I feel like they’re marketing to a demographic that is more willing to pay…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 3 months ago

    My boyfriend brought home a giant container of some sort of protein powder from GNC the other day – I couldn’t pronounce most of the ingredients in it. It actually made me think about the idea of “what is food.” I definitely think of unhealthy junk food when I think “ultra-processed” but technically I think his protein powder stuff would also be…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 3 months ago

    Rucha – this was a really good overview of the food distribution system. I’ll write more later, but just wanted to comment that it made me think about the whole Chipolte carnitas issues. Are you familiar with it? Many Chipotles stopped serving carnitas (pork) after they cut ties with one of their main supplies. They found out the supplier was…[Read more]

    • Hey Jodi,

      Sorry for late reply. Yes, I have heard about it. After that incident, they changed their meat suppliers to UK based suppliers Karro food and Tulip, which produce meat with motto “whatever is best for animals”. I think you are absolutely right. If the demands for humanely raised meats increases and well known food companies like Chi…[Read more]

      • I feel like Chipolte, in general, is kind of a yuppie place – I tend to see them in trendy, more upper-class type neighborhoods as opposed to low-income, inner-city, etc (in Richmond we have one in Carytown and one on campus, that’s it, the rest are out in the ‘burbs) – so I feel like they’re marketing to a demographic that is more willing to pay…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 3 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused
    First paragraph was direct and to the point. You defined IFAM and provided thesis that IFAM results in unsustainable practices and your essay will examine what can be done about and by whom.

    2. Essay is organized logically and very well-written
    I thought you provided good…[Read more]

  • jodiwinship posted a new activity comment 5 years, 3 months ago

    1. Thesis is well-articulated and clearly focused.
    Your introduction to the topic provides a clear thesis which is elaborated on throughout the essay.

    2. Essay is organized logically and very well-written
    Essay was organized well and was easy to follow. You do a great job of building and connecting arguments throughout the…[Read more]

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