Writer’s Process blog 4

Yay! Done with Unit 2!
I think this Unit two paper was the one that I was most satisfied with. The progress, workshops, and final, it went better than I thought it would. At the beginning of this unit, I had no idea what was going on and I did not have any idea on what to do this paper on. Each class I asked my group what was going on and just brain stormed on what we each were going to write about. I also asked a few questions this week to AP, which is something that I usually don’t. I learned more clearly on how to cite pictures using the Creative Commons site. I believe this paper was more suitable for me since the topic was something that I really enjoy talking about and researching specifically on art therapy was new and interesting knowledge that I gained through this assignment. My strength in this paper I think is my personal stories. Since I have first hand experienced problems with art and overcame that problem, I was more suited and comfortable to write on it using my personal stories and examples. Working with others online definitely helped me improve my paper; I do not know what it is but just the idea of people that I never met, commenting on my drafts and saying good things and leaving advices made me feel good about my writing. Through this assignment, I learned more about my own topic, art therapy, and also other writer’s topics since I read over theirs and commented on it. Some things that I have learned and I think that will be useful for Unit 3 is using creative commons and to be more communicative. Overall, this Unit two paper was a good practice for me and I can see my writing improving.

Writer’s Process Blog 3

I think I have accomplished the most work this week. I was able to fully understand the assignment for this unit,and came to a descicion of my topic for this essay. I went from art, to expressing through art, to an art style, to art therapy. It was hard to choose just one specific topic to talk about, but I hope I will be able to put in as much valuable information in 1000 words.

After doing some research on my topic, it is more clear on what I am going to focus on and how to share that knowledge with the audience. Honestly I did not know that art therapy was a thing. I learned that it was an actual a tool used to treat mental illness and improve mental health.

The workshop this week was very productive. I usually just do it without any thoughts since it is required to do it and it helps the other students, but this week I kept an open mind to learn and to gain something to help my own writing. This week, the feedback definitely helped me understand where I am lacking some work and where I could explode to make it better. I feel like commenting on other writer’s posts helped me a lot too since I was able to ask the questions I asked to the writers to myself, and I was also able to improve my ideas on what to write on mine.

Also, seeing other writer’s process on their draft gave me a lot of new knowledge and got me interested in different activities and subjects which I think is pretty cool. Not only am I learning more about my topic, but I am also attracted to learn more about the things that I usually would never be interested in.

Comments on Richmond Street Art

1. Being Publicly Interested:

The writer is sharing their view on how amazing the wall murals are around Richmond, and how it dresses up our city and highlight how important art is to this area.

2. Getting the Reader Interested/Content: Since you’re in the same content hub as this article, you are probably a medium-to-high buy-in reader. Are you now interested in this topic? Why/not? What questions do you have about this topic that the writer could answer for you? What else would you like to know?

I got to be more aware of the wall murals around the city and the effects it has to people. I feel like if an example or at least one mural drawing that the writer specifically likes and describe the artist or how it makes them feel would attract more audience and make them want to actually go around and look at those murals. I would like to know if seeing all those murals made you think about making one yourself.

3. Getting the Reader Interested/Narrator:

I can feel the writer’s presence, but I think adding more personal experience can really show the writer more clearly. The writer talks about walking from their house to any direction and seeing murals, maybe adding more personal experiences can help the audience feel more of your presence. Like, how that mural made you feel or asking yourself “I wonder how that artist came up with this idea and what is their story behind it?”

4. Source Use/Citation: Every time your writer says something that isn’t dependent on either his/her own personal knowledge or “common knowledge,” s/he should be referencing a source. Equally, if information obviously comes from research, it needs to be cited. Please edit your writer’s post and put in bold any moment where you feel like your writer needs to include research. Please underline anything that you think is research, but that your writer doesn’t describe as coming from a specific resource.

This sentence was already bolded “In fact, Buzz-feed has declared that Richmond has the best street art in the world (Bryan).” Buzz feed is not a substantive source, so maybe justifying it and backing it up with an substantive source can make it better.

5. Editor’s choice: What is your writer doing really well? Pay your writer a genuine, specific compliment so s/he knows what to keep doing.

I really like your view on the murals, I didn’t know that there was a process of searching blank wall space through out the city and inviting artists to draw on them. Interesting!

Response to Wear Yourself

Focused Topic: Either explain why the writer’s topic is clear or suggest ways it can be made more so.

The writer’s topic is very clear, fashion. I think the writer put enough information on fashion to make it absolutely clear that its their topic.

Writer’s Presence: Is your writer explaining his/her personal engagement with this topic? Is s/he using personal narrative techniques like showing and exploding the moment? Suggest at least one way in which you think your writer can improve his/her voice or presence in this text. Point out one thing you think is working.

I can feel the writer’s presence in their strong opinion on fashion. I think putting your own experience with fashion or show an example on what you wear on a certain event will make your presence more noticeable.

Are You Wikipedia?: On the scale of Wikipedia to Personal Essay, where is your writer? What do you think your writer can do to enhance his/her voice? Point out a good voice moment and one that’s not working.

The writer is doing a good job on writing a personal essay. Keep on putting your opinions on fashion but also put in some personal feeling and experience.

How’s Research Going?: Is your writer’s process visibly started? Is s/he beginning to talk about something that might be useful? Weigh in on this work. Is your writer moving in good directions? Why? Do his/her source/s look useful? Why? What advice can you give this writer as s/he moves forward in the research process?

There is no research yet!

How’s Citation Going?: If your writer is using research, is s/he citing as s/he goes (in other words, putting in quotation marks and parenthetical citations right away)?

No citations yet!

Optional Advice: Got any other advice for this writer?

I really like your essay so far, just keep doing what you’ve been doing until now!

Writer’s process blog 2

Writer’s Blog prompt #2
Focused Inquiry

The magazine project that we are working on currently, I am a bit confused on what I am supposed to do. It sounded similar to one of the assignments that we did last semester; how we were supposed to go to the library and pick a topic that we wanted to write an essay on. Some writing I have done last week, the speed dating post we had to put on Rampages. It helped me organize the things that I enjoy doing and what I just regularly do, but it was a bit weird too because I usually think that even though I write things about myself, people would not really care what I think or have to say. Also, the categories and subcategories activity that we did in class helped me have a better idea on how to attract the audience that I want and also it helped me sort out the content better.

The activities we did this week were very confusing to me. I know that we went to the library and looked through sites in class but because I did not understand the motif behind those activities I was lost this whole week. But being the person I am I did not ask questions but nodded like I knew what was going on.
It was very easy to choose a topic for paper 2 for me though. Even though I did not completely understand the directions, because I am interested in art and anything related to that, I decided to go in depth and write my paper on it. So far, I just touched the basics of it like my experience, the benefits of it, and one of the techniques of art. I am planning to go more in depth and add more techniques, maybe add some artists that I was inspired by, and more personal experiences.

Today’s workshop helped me a lot. While I was writing response to one of the post, I realized that I have to work on expanding my post and really “explode” on those big moments like we learned last semester. Also, when I was reading the comments from other writer’s on my first draft, because there were not that many criticism but had a lot of complements and helpful insights, I was able to reflect on it and start editing my first draft.

Response to The Powers Within

Focused Topic: Either explain why the writer’s topic is clear or suggest ways it can be made more so.

The writer’s topic is very clear in the draft. His topic is an energy called Chi. The title “the powers within” and his descriptions of it really shows that he is focusing his paper on that.

Writer’s Presence: Is your writer explaining his/her personal engagement with this topic? Is s/he using personal narrative techniques like showing and exploding the moment? Suggest at least one way in which you think your writer can improve his/her voice or presence in this text. Point out one thing you think is working.

There is definitely the writer’s presence in this post. They use an example of their own experience with Chi and also explain their opinion and feeling on it. Maybe exploding on the part where the writer was explaining their experience, tell us Nick’s reaction to it or how he came into believing/practicing it.

Are You Wikipedia?: On the scale of Wikipedia to Personal Essay, where is your writer? What do you think your writer can do to enhance his/her voice? Point out a good voice moment and one that’s not working.

I see a bit of a Wikipedia kind of a work in this post. I think the writer is doing fine showing their voice but also giving factual information with it.

How’s Research Going?: Is your writer’s process visibly started? Is s/he beginning to talk about something that might be useful? Weigh in on this work. Is your writer moving in good directions? Why? Do his/her source/s look useful? Why? What advice can you give this writer as s/he moves forward in the research process?

The writer is doing well informing the audience about this topic and it brings the audience to be more curious and into it. They included a video with this post, which was very useful because it visually shows what Chi is and what they can do with it.

How’s Citation Going?: If your writer is using research, is s/he citing as s/he goes (in other words, putting in quotation marks and parenthetical citations right away)?

No, but they did add a link at the end of their post.

Optional Advice: Got any other advice for this writer?

Keep it up! It’s really getting me interested in this Chi energy.